I am embarrassed to admit that, eight years and countless drafts into writing my first novel, I finally came to truly understand a piece of writing advice I had heard countless times: Make your characters want something.
Seriously, I thought? I’m just learning this, after all this time? But in my own defense, I feel the need to explain that for years I thought I WAS making my main character want something. She wanted to NOT be her mom. Turns out, that’s not enough.
When Characters Refrain
What I’ve come to understand is that not wanting something actually leaves a vacuum, giving a character little to motivate them. Likewise, it gives the reader nothing to root for, nothing to care about as they embark on the story with that character. There is no story in not wanting something.
Leaning on the lack of something is a tick in my writing that I’ve come to recognize more and more lately, something I am getting better at correcting.
For instance (and I’m just making this up, it’s not actually in my story), say someone pounds on the front door. I used to write something like: nobody moved. While factually accurate, the wording of “nobody moved” leaves a big question mark. What did they do? Did they look at each other? Did they turn pale with fear? Did the room go silent except for the water boiling in a pot on the stove?
See how that lack of something just isn’t very compelling?
When Characters Want Something
In the last draft of my novel, I decided to make my main character want something. Specifically, I decided that she wanted to be a forest ranger. And guess what. My first chapters started singing along like never before.
The sentences were la-la-la-ing through those first fifty pages, where they used to lag for *some reason* I couldn’t pin down. It was such a simple shift. I honestly hadn’t thought it would change the story much at all, but it did.
And why a forest ranger? Because that’s who she is. I know her a lot better than I did back when I started writing this story. No doubt that also helped me to finally commit to her desires.
So if you’re struggling with a story, or if your beta readers are telling you it lags a bit in parts, ask yourself – what does your character want? And then choose something. Anything. Maybe your main character is after a high-powered career in finance, or they’re a kid longing for chocolate fudge, or a dog yearning for a bone. Make them want something.
Jeff Diamond says
Really like this. I’ve also noticed that I use “nobody moved” and the like in my writing. Just started reading your posts, and an really enjoying them!
April says
Thank you. I’m glad they’re useful. Cheers!
Amanda says
I love your ability to bring so much clarity to the art of writing. I just discovered you and quite frankly I’m enamored and you’re a gem!
April says
Thank you so much. That’s so nice to hear.
Sara says
Great post, April. Thank you. I never really thought about it that way, but you are right.
April says
Glad it was helpful Sara. Cheers.
Hans says
“Making your characters want something”
Isn’t that where you start before writing?
Sketching the characters, their characters, possible growing directions?
Having them interact with unforseen events (Arrival of something/someone) as a trigger-event.
A carefully defined balance between protagonists and antagonists and by-standers… Where everyone ‘wants’ something else, and causes conflicts
April says
When you say it like that…
I have to admit that I did not plan at all when I started this book. I just knew I wanted to write, so I started writing, which was good, but I know so much more now than I did then. I will never again just start writing. Do you do full character sketches before you start a story?
Bryan Fagan says
It’s all about learning. We’re all in it together we just roll at a different pace.
Bryan Fagan says
This is important and it can save a writer a lot of time when developing a character. In the novel I’m working on within the first 20 pages (give or take) one of the characters wants to own a restaurant. Simple as that. From there the story takes off on this wild journey of putting together such a thing. Not only does this help the writer and the story it helps the reader too. They see where the story is going and now the adventure can get under way.
April says
I so agree, Bryan. Thanks for sharing. As for saving a lot of time, I guess that ship’s sailed for me, but hopefully someone will read this and save themselves a few years of trouble. Cheers!